Wikipedia:Peer review/Tooth enamel/archive1

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Tooth enamel[edit]

This article recently failed in a bid for featured stauts. However, the main author made many improvements, including adding more substance, adding endnotes, and rewording some awkward sections. While the subject matter is not something I usually get too excited about, I think it is an excellent presentation of its subject and now deserves to be a featured article. - Jersyko 00:41, May 16, 2005 (UTC)

What I noticed to be missing from this article is any mention of the technology, health effects, and cultural phenomenon of teeth whitening. Since it's the enamel that's being whitened, the topic could almost do with its own section further down in this article. (Unless people feel that this should be a separate article.) — RJH 17:09, 17 May 2005 (UTC)
That's a great point. I have not learned anything on tooth whitening as of yet, but I would bet it would be enough to warrant its own article. Nonetheless, something should probably be said in this article about the effect whitening has on the enamel and a link to the other article needed. -dozenist 19:17, 17 May 2005 (UTC)
That suggestion gave me even more ideas, so I added information on tooth whitening under a new topic on "Effects of Dental Procedures". It may need fine-tuning, but I need to look at it later on to judge again. -dozenist 22:59, 17 May 2005 (UTC)
I like the changes you made, they improve the article. Good work. - Jersyko 12:30, May 18, 2005 (UTC)

I know the author of this article has written stubs for a lot of the (formerly) dead wikilinks in this article, but I'm still seeing a bit too much red here. I would love to do it myself, but I've never heard of most of them and wouldn't know where to start researching. This isn't something that would prevent me from supporting it as a featured article, but I think others might point this out as a flaw. - Jersyko talk 18:13, May 28, 2005 (UTC)